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PostSubject: Vendetta #111 Grades   Vendetta #111 Grades EmptyTue May 26, 2015 12:22 am

PA3 vs. Alex Falcon
Singles Match
GRADER: Greg


Alex Falcon: Your match has a lot of action! Unfortunately, at times, I had trouble following along at some points because I was having trouble visualizing what was going on because of a lack of description in parts. I really enjoyed the spot on the apron and then the springboard into the ring. I felt that was a nice high spot for the match! I wasn’t aware of what the iWin was without looking at your profile, so a little bit of description would’ve been nice there! I felt at times the match was rushed a little bit, which would’ve been helped by some more selling. The last thing I want to say is I felt like Falcon dominated too much of this match, especially where he is the face going against the bigger heel wrestler in Prince Alex III. I think there is room to grow from here, but I enjoy your action and think that you have a great mind for coming up with some nice spots!

Prince Alex III: Nitpicky thing here(and this doesn’t affect my final decision, just something I personally want to point out) I can’t stand when people use wrestling terminology in their matches, like when you said Alex “doesn’t sell.” I see writing matches like a radio announcer calling a match, he wouldn’t break kayfabe. Others may disagree with me on this, and for that very point, as I said, I’m not using it against you in the grading. You had action, but the description really fell short of painting any sort of picture for what was happening. It was very generic, and left a lot to be desired. There was some selling present, but it was very thin and wasn’t really enough to help dictate the flow of the match. As you had the duty of writing the later portion of the match, selling would have helped a lot to make it feel like it was indeed later in the match, it would’ve helped the flow. One thing I really enjoyed from your match was how you had Prince Alex dominate, which as I said in Falcon’s paragraph above, I feel is truer to what the story would be in this match. My suggestion is to really work on describing what happens in the ring, as well as the selling. By selling I mean more than just what the wrestlers are doing after the moves, but how their bodies ache from the moves. For me, the greatest strength you have is the ability to incorporate storylines into the match, something I’ve never done very well with.

Decision: At the end of this, I would say Falcon’s portion had better description and selling. Both halves felt rushed to me in their execution and could’ve used some pacing to heighten the “suspense” if you will. I felt Prince Alex III worked the story of this match better, having the bigger man show dominance. I’m going to have to give this match to Alex Falcon as his portion of the match gave better description and selling and that put me into the environment more than PA3’s did.


Ryan Quill vs. Azrael
Singles Match
GRADER: None


Double No-Show. I'll be retiring Azrael for the time being.

Evan Flare vs Matthew Bradley
Singles Match
GRADER: None


MB wins by no-show. THE STREAK LIVES!

Dante Cross vs Razor Xtreme
Singles Match
GRADER: None


Double no-show
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PostSubject: Re: Vendetta #111 Grades   Vendetta #111 Grades EmptyTue May 26, 2015 7:57 am

Grades are out. Card will be up in a few hours, hopefully.
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PostSubject: Re: Vendetta #111 Grades   Vendetta #111 Grades EmptyWed May 27, 2015 1:43 am

Thank you very much good sir, I'll work on it in the future. My only reasonings behind what you criticized:

1. Falcon is the face, so I figured having explosive action from him would be more entertaining. Having him chain together a lot of moves. That's one of the reasons I had him hit most of the moves because then Prince's role was to slow the match down.

2. Falcon is the veteran. I know I've been away for a while but I've even been here on XWA and had quite the run, as well as 2 other feds with great success. I figured it's adequate for the veteran to overcome the giant, especially since speed and tactic are advantages just as much as size and strength.

3. Yeah, I didn't sell as much as I'd have liked. Before I started I thought the whole thing had to fit into 2,000 words, not just the match. If I had known that, there would have been about 900 more words of selling/action from both sides.

4. After the iWin was hit I think I had Ted Cedar put it into context on the next line what the move was, and if you didn't know what Sliced Bread #2 was than I did my best describing it as a 3/4 facelock while running up the corner to slam the opponent.

Not complaining about the grading, you did a good job and analysis. Keep it up, sir.

Testicles, out.
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