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| Subject: Vendetta #57 Grades Sun Aug 25, 2013 1:41 am | |
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| Subject: Re: Vendetta #57 Grades Sun Aug 25, 2013 7:52 am | |
| Grader: Ian - Riley:
Obviously wasn't your best performance as you stated yourself, but it wasn't bad. I think you did well to do some basic research on the Shade character and you made an attempt to present him in a positive light which was good on your part. Considering he lost, it probably wasn't the debut he was looking for in terms of establishing roster position but you did establish a character and that's good. Nice action from you, as always.
- Shade:
I'm curious what your thoughts were coming into this match... If you were planning to do a squash match to build character I'd have rather you did it with a segment with an enhancement talent instead of trying to do so in a legitimate match-up. In reality it would make sense to have a match like this, but in E-Fedding, especially here, I don't get it. I thought you did a good job with what is here. Description isn't bad and it flowed fairly well.
- Verdict:
I have to go with Riley Williamson. I'm not sure what's going on with Myke as based on what I was told to expect from Snoopz there was a huge disconnect.
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| Subject: Re: Vendetta #57 Grades Sun Aug 25, 2013 7:53 am | |
| Cooper showed up at the last possible moment with a match that essentially amounts to a segment. He wins via no-show.
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| Subject: Re: Vendetta #57 Grades Sun Aug 25, 2013 7:53 am | |
| Grader: Ian - Reyes:
Just an excellent start to your match. The commentary was on point and realistic, which is a rare treat. Your opening paragraph was exceptional as well, as starting Razor in a position of control was important considering you're new, and you wrote his heel persona very well. You continue to nail home that Razor is a heel with his actions. Everything was going great until I read “and this kid just blew his wad.” Considering the nature of the programming I'm not saying this is unrealistic... I'm just saying I could have done without it.
There's a lot to like here... You are extremely well-written as your match has the kind of flow I'm used to from Main Eventers. You did a good deal of diving into Razor's character, which is something I really look for, as well as presenting very little of your own character but doing it in a way that is intriguing. You've established that he's most likely a babyface based on his interactions with Razor and you've established he's got a lot of “heart.” Perhaps it's cliché but you're doing good work in subtlety defining your character. But most impressively, perhaps, was how realistic it was. You didn't try to do too much. The only thing that I think was missing was a post-match confrontation... It would have made a lot of sense for Razor to attack Reyes after a loss like this. Just a thought.
- Razor:
You guys started similarly. Both of you went with starting Razor off with some cheap heat which is a good route to take. After the initial paragraph I didn't stop reading again until I was done, so this is all going to be closing comments. I thought this was really well done. There was a lot of action, perhaps too much in fact. You were very obviously heel throughout but you did a lot to keep the match relevant to the storylines. Maybe it was a coincidence but I loved that you continued the Smoke/Cedar beef with Razor. It just made too much sense. Your finish was solid and well written, but much like Reyes' finish I think it was missing something. I know grading is supposed to be bell-to-bell it seems like both of you stopped the story about a page too soon.
- Verdict:
I've got to go with Razor Xtreme. This wasn't the most torn I've been in a match-grading but it's right up there, with the difference being that Razor's match was just a little more entertaining. There wasn't a big difference here at all.
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| Subject: Re: Vendetta #57 Grades Sun Aug 25, 2013 7:53 am | |
| This will go down as a no-contest as Proggy told me about half-way through the week that the Demento character is done (at least for now) and that he's going full-time with his diva.. and I'm not surprised Kenyon showed despite his excuses as to why he had no-showed. Southern Wayne is officially removed from the roster, as is Dave Demento.
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| Subject: Re: Vendetta #57 Grades Sun Aug 25, 2013 7:54 am | |
| I knew about half way into the week that Storey wasn't going to show, so this doesn't register on my radar really. Dominik Diveraz has won via no-show, and hopefully we get to see a legitimate debut from Mr. Storey before we make it to Endure.
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| Subject: Re: Vendetta #57 Grades Sun Aug 25, 2013 7:54 am | |
| Grader: Ian - Brown:
The paragraph at the top was awful. I don't mean to be overly critical but that was really poorly written. I seen at the bottom of your post that you warned it wasn't your best stuff and I agree; I've seen you a lot better. Your first two paragraphs were a solid start, and your third paragraph was alright, but considering there was only one more it never came together. It's similar to the 90 second Hardy/Sting match to be honest. No flow beyond the end of the second paragraph. No characterization. A crummy finish. I'm sure you know what you need to work on as this isn't your usual performance.
- JHalc:
You spent an unusual amount of time in your opening paragraph describing facial expressions. You clearly tried to throw some characterization in there with Jhalc looking to throw Jaylon off early on. I was entertained by your commercial break but I'm not really a fan. It's “realistic” but a little over-produced to me. I don't think it's necessary.
- Verdict:
I'm glad to see JHalc bounce back before Endure, as he pretty clearly won the match. Jaylon Brown's match just wasn't what a match of this magnitude should be and Jhalc was clearly superior in every aspect I look for.
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| Subject: Re: Vendetta #57 Grades Sun Aug 25, 2013 7:55 am | |
| Grader: Jay - Caleb Spires:
I am going to do your match first, considering that it is still fresh in my mind. I don't have a lot of complaints. There were a few bits where the writing broke down a little, and I think it was mainly just you trying to write your way out of a hole that EG Deal had buried you in, without trying to seem like superman. Smoke's first getting involved could have been done a little better. I didn't really care for the running down to the ring abruptly only to get kicked in the face. Especially because it just led to EG Deal adding more to the punishment Caleb had taken. I am just being picky about it though man. Honestly, you know you are good, and the most difficult part of grading your matches is really trying to find something that is worth complaining about. You have it down to a science at this point. I do feel like the match was lackluster in the actual excitement of it. I don't know how to explain it, but it just felt like you went through the motions.
- EG Deal:
Two weeks ago I gave you some advice on how to make your stuff better and you seem like you have put it all to good use. This is your best match that I have read. I know you were real pumped about your last couple, and it has really shown in how you have progressed. You're story telling in this match was great. For EG Deal it was proving himself against the best in XWA. For Caleb it was all about trying to keep an eye out for whenever Smoke was going to come off the announce table and get involved. It was a stroke of genius for you to put him on commentary, and it really helped the story. The action in your match slowed down from how you had been writing, and at points, your description was on par with Caleb's. I also felt like you had better use of the hardcore stipulation, and you had each man really get their shots in. EG had the big size advantage, but you didn't sell Caleb as just a smaller man. You had him be the wise ring veteran. He had the big man beat before Smoke got involved, and I was on the edge of my seat trying to figure out where you were going. This was a great effort, regardless of the outcome.
- And the Winner Is....:
This was a lot closer call than I bet a lot of people thought it was. Both of you had the story. Smoke Xtreme was involved in both matches, and kind of in a similar way. That was the story that both of you set up in your match, and I really feel like Abdel had the better of it. Instead of having Smoke just appear, he came out on commentary, and really drove home the feud between himself and Caleb. He saved the match for EG Deal, who was about to tap out. As far as entertainment, I kind of feel like EG also had the edge. He used the stipulation better than Caleb in my opinion, and the spots that he had left an impression that I just didn't get from Caleb's match. When it comes to how it was written, Caleb, as always, had near flawless description. His match had the flow that has made him a five time champion. Abdel, on the other hand, hit a few speed bumps, but has taken all of the pointers that he has been given and has made improvements. It is a matter of Caleb putting forth the same effort we see week in and week out, against a kid that is rapidly improving and giving it more and more effort every week. In, what I imagine will be a disputed decision, I am going to have to give the match to EG Deal. Like I said, his match spots left more of an impression. His description was better than he has ever done. His story was better. Caleb's might have had the slightly better flow, but I do not feel like it was the superior match overall.
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| Subject: Re: Vendetta #57 Grades Sun Aug 25, 2013 7:55 am | |
| Grader: Ian - Lights and Akira:
Both Dwight Lights and Akira no-showed the match. I'm always discouraged when I give someone a chance to put themselves in a title match and that's not enough to inspire them. I knew ahead of time with Akira that a post wasn't going to happen and Lights has kids so they're understandable.
- Anvil:
I liked the really simple start of Anvil being the aggressor and everyone else attacking Anvil. Classic stuff... Just makes sense. I think your match did well to incorporate the fatal four way stipulation and there a few spots on the outside that I really enjoyed. You put a lot of effort into this post and I think your description was well done pretty much throughout although there were some parts where it dipped a bit. You did very well to establish yourself as a legitimate heel character without making the match completely about yourself. You made Akira look exceptional as well. Good stuff.
- Daniels:
Immediately I see something that is confusing. “on the rebound, Daniels leaped over Anvil’s head“ which on it's own is an impossible task given the lack of other position description, but then you go on to say Anvil dropped down and he jumped off his back. I'm not sure which you meant or if you meant both, but neither seems too likely for different reasons. A 7 footer wrestling that style is just not realistic. Frankly when I seen this I expected a poor performance from you, but I was pleasantly surprised. You did well to incorporate the theme of the match as there were a lot of in-and-out action. I liked the little bits of characterization you did, especially at the end where Riley Daniels wins cheap. All in all it was a lot better than I expected giving the size of your match which goes to show you, quantity < quality.
- Verdict:
Despite the kind words about Riley Daniels' post, I just didn't see this one as all that competitive. Anvil's match had vastly superior description as well as entertainment, and he did more with the fatal four way stipulation. The winner is Axel Anvil.
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| Subject: Re: Vendetta #57 Grades Sun Aug 25, 2013 7:55 am | |
| Greg no-showed which completely caught me off guard. I think we need to scale back his work load as he seems to be generally caught up in school right now. Hopefully everything is alright with him. David Michaels wins this match via no-show.
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| Subject: Re: Vendetta #57 Grades Sun Aug 25, 2013 7:56 am | |
| I'm going to be treating this as a segment. Hitman Alex will get the points for the victory, but I won't consider what happened a Drake no-show. Congratulations on the win and I think I speak for everyone when I say I'm interested to see where this goes.
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| Subject: Re: Vendetta #57 Grades Sun Aug 25, 2013 7:56 am | |
| Grader: Snoopz Minkaro - As usual, great description from you. Your match flows very well. Your match starts off good with some typical chain grappling. Nothing special, but a decent enough start to the match. Your match progressively gets better. The Back Suplex with Evan angled so his shoulder his the ring apron was pretty innovative. I like how you seem to have both men targeting a specific body part, Minkaro the shoulder and Evan the back. Your selling is quite good, especially with moments like Minkaro trying to lift Evan but being unable to due to the pain in his back. I marked a bit for the chop battle. The Pele Kick reversal was great. Not sure how I feel about Evan kicking out of Minkaro's finisher, although this is a main event match and it was a way to make your opponent look good as opposed to yourself, so I kinda like it. I love how Evan keeps going for his Gutwrench finisher, but Minkaro keeps finding ways out of it. Loved the big Spear. Also loved the final, match-ending Spear. This was a great match. The storytelling with Minkaro and Evan trying to work on a specific body part and the selling were key factors in this match that made it so great. The action was entertaining, though there wasn't much that stood out as innovative. Some, but not much. All-in-all, I was very pleased with how this came out and it'll be tough for Evan to top it. Evan Flare - Much-like Minkaro, you've got excellent descriptions. It doesn't flow quite as well as Mink's does, because of some repetition. For an example, it's basically "They do this. They do that." in the beginning. Nevertheless, it's good descriptions. Good start to your match. Some mat-based wrestling before you start to get a bit more exciting with the Suicide Leg Drop. Minkaro limping a bit after the Leg Drop was a nice touch to add to the selling of the match. The action really picks up in your match ad I loved the European Uppercut reversal to the Suicide Dive. I also quite liked the Powerbomb. The match gets pretty intense, in terms of close kickouts and big moves. Not sure I liked the ending too much. It just seemed a bit rushed. Like, Minkaro kicks out of a close one and then Evan just picks him up and lands his finisher to win. Very basic for a main event match finish and, like I said, it just seemed rush. Another very good match. Your action really excelled in this one. It was an exciting match to read. Verdict - I'm just going to come right out with the victory. Minkaro wins this one. I felt like his post told a story better than Evan's. Evan, in my opinion, edged it in terms of actual action. However, Minkaro edged it in terms of descriptions and did a much-better job of telling a story with his post as well as doing amazing at selling, something you don't see often enough in eFedding. This was a close match, and a definite MotN contender, but in the end it was Minkaro who edged the victory for me. |
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